I am swimming in unknown waters. . . And I like it. Firstly, I’d like to thank everyone who responded to my previous post about editing. After reading what everyone had to say, I put my book down for about a week and then I picked it back up with fresher eyes. I started reading it and. . . . Yickes! Did I write something so terrible? The delete key was most often used in my editing process. I ended up changing most of the opening scene. The action of the scene remained the same, but the wording was changed. I learned that editing is a lot easier and more fun then writing the actual book.
I also found myself changing the hero’s name. Looking back at it, Nathan Hill came off as a farmer’s name. Nathanial Thrillson works a lot better. What do you think? Which name works better for an inner-city cop who’s running from his own past?
For me, the first sentence and the first paragraph are very important. If they don’t grab my attention, I will not be inspired to read on. Here’s my first paragraph. Did it get your attention?
Her heart took a final beat and plummeted to her heals. After all of those years, Jordan Powell still recognized him. No, she thought and shook her head, hoping to death that it wasn’t him. He had to be a look-a-like with the same sexy face and chocolate bedroom eyes. Maybe it was the hot sun shining in her eyes. The man she remembered had jet black hair, and this one had a shaved head which gave her the impression of danger and seduction. Her memory also didn’t conjure up a six pack like the one she saw now. This man was running shirtless and his body was all tanned skin and sleek muscles.